Ok, don't worry yourselves everyone. This is not a drill. Due to Deviant Art's word cap, I realized a bunch of edits going into my story have not been getting updated. So, I made a Google Doc which you can follow here https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NwdIJMALxxi6egHz832IuNIHy1J7JAqulJFoGeLM5tY/edit?hl=en_US or an actual hyperlinky thingy below in the description. I was gonna just delete this and re-post something about it, but with so many of you commenting I was just overcome by your words. So, I wanted to keep them so that I can remember you all! Thanks!
Also, for additional fan work (art, writings, etc) check out my favorite gallery called "My Little Dashie Fan Work" here http://robcakeran53.deviantart.com/favourites/46446902
...Thank you... So much...
I hate you...you are an amazing writer. This story is so deep and touching it feels like I just cried my eyes out.
Good show, good sir, good show.
I am writing a scene where she meets your character from "My Little Dashie" and they tell each other of their experience with their favorite character. I will not follow through with the scene without your consent. He is your character and I am asking for your permission. If you say no, I understand.
you have no idea how hard i cried
playing to the moon music and imagining it at the same time = eyes pulled out by tears thx a lot
This was just awesome and brilliant.
Seriously though, great story, man. Even though it is sad and my emotions would have liked a different ending, it really is a masterpiece. I'm not sure if you're trying to be humble but let me just say, if you wrote this and can't see the greatness in it, then your writing skills far exceed your skills of judgment.
The timeline of the story doesn't make a lot of sense either. I thought it was supposed to read like a journal at first, what with the casual passing of events, and just telling what happened instead of showing it. But then this is changed during the middle when you actually describe in scene, and then the ending of it as well. The consistency is very off-putting, and I would've preferred the latter much more. It would give more room for detail, and well, put in some emotion to the story. As it is right now, it passes by very fast. I suppose to show that time flies by- but there's not much context to go with it. I don't see much development with the main character, or with Rainbow Dash. They just exist.
I would suggest a rewrite of this story completely, but that's just me. And a lot of people seem to like it how it is, so I suppose it is hitting some emotional points that I can't really see. Since this was written 2 years ago, your writing style may have changed. Either way, all I can say is that I hope you continue to improve in your writing in the future.