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Ok, don't worry yourselves everyone. This is not a drill. Due to Deviant Art's word cap, I realized a bunch of edits going into my story have not been getting updated. So, I made a Google Doc which you can follow here https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NwdIJMALxxi6egHz832IuNIHy1J7JAqulJFoGeLM5tY/edit?hl=en_US or an actual hyperlinky thingy below in the description. I was gonna just delete this and re-post something about it, but with so many of you commenting I was just overcome by your words. So, I wanted to keep them so that I can remember you all! Thanks!

Also, for additional fan work (art, writings, etc) check out my favorite gallery called "My Little Dashie Fan Work" here http://robcakeran53.deviantart.com/favourites/46446902
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IMPORTANT OVER THE REST! Here is the link to the google docs version. I'm not sure how commenting works in that program, but you can simply comment here if you'd like. [link]

Edit 12/04/2011 Well, some people have been having problems with gdocs, so I now have it up on FiMfiction.net, here ya'll go! [link]

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This story, though it's original intentions were not existant, has opened my own eyes to how I write a story. It's not always about the details, or how much content is in it. It's about finding that right tone for the story; nailing down the emotion as it fills your mind with it's words. And, most important about this story, I do not give you, the readers, a full ending.

Why?

It's simple; if I gave you guys an ending, say I whether Dashie remembers her memories or not, then that means the story is done. That's it, so you are done worrying about it. With leaving this open for you, it sticks in your mind longer. You think about it, what could have happened or what you want to happen. That, is this stories goal. It is to keep you wondering, thinking, about what could happen.

I know there will be many people who wish to continue this story. Give closure to it, and make it happy. That is fine. That just means that is how they want it to end, but does not mean it is officially how it ends. I leave that up to you, my readers, to question, ponder, and wonder what becomes of Dashie and her adoptive father.

Thank you, again, for reading this. It has meant a lot to hear such good about this simple writing.

On another note, I'd like to give a huge thanks once again to my editor, and he has even graced us with some words, so if you'd like here you go! Copy/pasta'd from the chat with him.

:iconsirpeppermintjam: Hi there! I'm Peppermint Jam, editor of "My Little Dashie." I just wanted to say a few things, since, well, editors rarely get thier voice heard(as far as I know).

Anyway, a while ago, ROB sent me a note over Deviantart, asking me to edit this fic of his. He told me it was based off of that one comic that is linked in the story. I had seen the comic, and that made me a little wary.

Then I read it. Oh Celestia, the emotions I felt while reading...I broke down in a Starbucks. I had to be a part of this. I told him I'd edit it, for great justice.

One week, many arguments, a few revisions, and three nights without sleep, and here we are. I'm  not surprised at how popular this is. I knew this would be something great.
I've noticed that the ending has a bit of a love/hate relationship. I want it to be clear that it was left open like that on purpose. We wanted the reader to come to their own conclusion. I still have about four different endings sitting on my desktop. They will probably never be posted.

I've learned a lot this past week or so. A lot about writing, and a lot about myself. It's been a pleasure being a part of this.

I just want to say thank you. To everyone. This fandom never ceases to amaze me. It's the first one I've been a part of, and the first one that's changed me for the better.

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Hope you enjoy this, it's based off of a comic I saw on Equestria Daily a day or so ago. [link] by this amazing man here: [link]

For additional fan work of this story, check out my favorite gallery here: [link]

If you make something and wish it to be shared in the folder, please don't hesitate to let me know. I'd love to have it in there!

:iconsirpeppermintjam:, :iconcthuluigi: and :icondelta-pangaea: thanks guys, and I hope to continue to get this fine tuned when needed.

Shit, how could I forget? My Little Pony, the pony characters used, and Equestria in general all belong to Hasbro. I hope you guys don't get mad over this and send it, or me, to the moon.
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:iconbusterbuizel:
In all my years as a writer on dA, I have never read nor experienced such a heartwarming and sad story. Every paragraph had me crying, you really nailed it, I cannot express such... Well, words do me no justice. I was kept wide awake last night by the knot in my chest. I mean... YOU ARE AWESOME AND I JUST WANNA GO NUTS AND SAY THAT THIS STORY TOUCHED MY HEART!

...Thank you... So much...
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Mood: Tearful ~UltimaQuazar Mar 12, 2013  New member Student Writer
D'x You made me cry so much!
I hate you...you are an amazing writer. This story is so deep and touching it feels like I just cried my eyes out.
Good show, good sir, good show.
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:iconunbroken-angel-queen:
Alright, I would like to say, that you are an amazing writer. "My Little Dashie" was amazing. I would like to ask if I could borrow your character for a story I am writing called "Invisible Walls". It is about a girl falling into a deep depression and finds the show we all love so dearly. She is unaware of the Bronies and their existence in our world. Despite the shows bright colors, she is still depressed. She loves Pinkie Pie, because she reminds her of when she was younger and loved to make everyone happy. One night, she makes a wish to be somewhere she can be happy. Then, she she awakes, she's in Equestria.
I am writing a scene where she meets your character from "My Little Dashie" and they tell each other of their experience with their favorite character. I will not follow through with the scene without your consent. He is your character and I am asking for your permission. If you say no, I understand.
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:iconrobcakeran53:
Sure, go for it.
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:iconxxbirthdaymousecrexx:
~xXBirthdayMousecreXx Mar 4, 2013  Student Digital Artist
you have no idea how hard i cried

playing to the moon music and imagining it at the same time = eyes pulled out by tears thx a lot
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:iconimshysoihide:
Thank you
This was just awesome and brilliant.
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:iconjaders75:
I've never cried so hard over a story...but it was worth it.
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:iconomashuman:
Dose anybody know if there is another version of m'y Little dashie story which it doesn't end in complète sadness ? Because the one in the Link made me cry so much, and i hate crying... i hate sad ending.... so of someone knows any story or knows a place where i Can fond one.... Can you please tell me ?
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:iconksma:
Okay, so I read this story about two weeks ago and haven't been able to get it out I've my head. I've tried to come up with my own little "canon" ending where they meet again and everything ends out alright, but I can't think of anything that does this story justice and makes sense. I'm not sure why I'm writing this here, I guess it's just as a way to get over it since I've practically been obsessed over it the past two weeks.

Seriously though, great story, man. Even though it is sad and my emotions would have liked a different ending, it really is a masterpiece. I'm not sure if you're trying to be humble but let me just say, if you wrote this and can't see the greatness in it, then your writing skills far exceed your skills of judgment.
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~Darkhymns Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
After reading this story, I can't help but feel bothered by it. Since it's simply a wish-fulfillment premise, I guess it serves its purpose. Still, there's a lot of potential that's wasted. How does one hide a cartoon pony from the public for fifteen years? How does Rainbow Dash, stuck in isolation with this one nameless guy, feel about her situation? Certainly she would be yearning for some other contact, or you know, wondering why she's the only cartoon pony in existence? With this loner (who apparently has no human companions whatsoever) keeping a little pony all to himself for this long, it adds some really strange undertones that I can't shake out of.

The timeline of the story doesn't make a lot of sense either. I thought it was supposed to read like a journal at first, what with the casual passing of events, and just telling what happened instead of showing it. But then this is changed during the middle when you actually describe in scene, and then the ending of it as well. The consistency is very off-putting, and I would've preferred the latter much more. It would give more room for detail, and well, put in some emotion to the story. As it is right now, it passes by very fast. I suppose to show that time flies by- but there's not much context to go with it. I don't see much development with the main character, or with Rainbow Dash. They just exist.

I would suggest a rewrite of this story completely, but that's just me. And a lot of people seem to like it how it is, so I suppose it is hitting some emotional points that I can't really see. Since this was written 2 years ago, your writing style may have changed. Either way, all I can say is that I hope you continue to improve in your writing in the future.
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